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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was archived by Ian Rose via FACBot (talk) 08:49, 22 July 2017 [1].


Nominator(s): Exemplo347 (talk) 17:14, 1 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

This article discusses a military unit, part of the East India Company's Bengal Army, that played an instrumental role in the early stages of the Indian Mutiny. An A-Class review was successful, so this is the next logical stage. I'll respond to comments within 24 hours (usually) and I'll make sure that any actionable changes are carried out. Regards Exemplo347 (talk) 17:14, 1 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Support on prose per my standard disclaimer. Well done. As always, feel free to revert my copyediting. These are my edits. - Dank (push to talk) 00:22, 2 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Image review

@Nikkimaria: It's part of a large memorial, and I believe it's covered under India's Freedom of Panorama. If that's not the case it's no big issue, it'll take me seconds to remove it from the article. Exemplo347 (talk) 01:33, 2 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
My understanding based on this is that engravings are not covered by FOP in India. Is there another reason for this to be PD - age, for example? Nikkimaria (talk) 01:35, 2 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
I'm not sure about the age of the plaque or the memorial that it's part of. I've removed the image from the article. Exemplo347 (talk) 01:44, 2 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

comments

  • minor quibbles: British India in lead should be linked, as it is in the box. And There was a struggle, leading to the death of a cavalry trooper and a civilian weak construction. Perhaps "A minor struggle lead to the death of a cavalry trooper and a civilian....?" auntieruth (talk) 21:23, 5 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
@Auntieruth55: I've made the changes you suggested, let me know if you have any other ideas! Regards Exemplo347 (talk) 22:33, 5 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from FunkMonk

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  • Hi, I'll review this soon. FunkMonk (talk) 21:54, 6 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • " instructed the Governor-General to" Name?
  • "forces of Daulat Rao Sindhia" Which was who?
  • It would seem a good idea to give some introduction/background to the East India Company.
  • The intro seems on the short side, it should be a summary of the entire article.
  • Everything that is linked in the lead should also have a link at first occurrence in the article body.
  • "The actions of the 3rd Bengal Light Cavalry themselves were described by Major Agha Amin" When?
  • You there, Exemplo347? FunkMonk (talk) 00:29, 12 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Source review from Ealdgyth

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  • What makes http://www.defencejournal.com/2017-6/a-dj.asp a high quality reliable source?
  • What makes http://www.britishempire.co.uk/index.htm a high quality reliable source?
  • "These rumours reached Lieutenant Colonel George M. Carmichael-Smyth, in temporary command of the regiment," is sourced to Clark p. 92, but page 92 on google books does not support this information at all. In fact, it doesn't mention Carmichael-Smyth at all. Nor does it mention rumors - it's just a list of commanders. There are also problems with all the other information sourced to Clark p. 92, because much of it is listings of battles and battle honors, which is not supported on page 92. An example: "The regiment earned the "Delhi 1803", "Leswarree" and "Deig" battle honours during this campaign." ... p. 92 lists "Delhi" "Laswaree" and "Deig" at the top, but does not connect these honors to the specific campaign referred to in the article text.
  • What makes the Mutiny Memoirs (a primary source) a high quality reliable source?
  • Same for Fifty-two Stories of The Indian Mutiny?
  • Same for Narrative of the Siege and Capture of Bhurtpore?
  • Same for Forty-one years in India?
  • I randomly googled three sentences and nothing showed up except mirrors. Earwig's tool shows no copyright violations.
Otherwise everything looks good. Ealdgyth - Talk 14:13, 7 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Coord note

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Exemplo347, are you planning to respond to outstanding comments? We'll need to archive otherwise. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 08:57, 17 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Ian Rose: The nominator hasn't edited any Wikipedia pages for a week now. You may proceed to archive. Parcly Taxel 09:09, 18 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. No further edits should be made to this page.